Having only stopped at the garage sale on a whim
the allure of this face wasn't to be ignored.
Going home she placed the frame on the mantle
and grinned at the lovely face .
Later that evening when coming in from the garden
Isabelle saw the woman behind the screen door.
It was then that she realized the house was no longer
hers, but for the mere price of $1.99 she had given it up.
The word "Leave" was hissed into her ear.
Now, that is one great Magpie, I got shivers.
ReplyDeleteOoh! I love the way you have developed on the picture. :) Good job!
ReplyDelete...and she seemed like such a nice girl from her picture
ReplyDeleteNeat twist. I like it.
Chilling!
ReplyDelete..what a turn of events... great write.
ReplyDelete~Kelvin
Can you say 'goosebumps?'
ReplyDeleteChilling ~ and beautifully written.
Shivers left like moments stolen beyond the frame... Great take on this one.
ReplyDeleteWow, that was a good one.
ReplyDeleteWow! LOVED it! You know, I do not look into mirrors in antique shops unless I feel really right about it, have the right vibes...for the very reason your post sets out! Haha! This was great!
ReplyDeleteWhew! that is ghostly- thanks.
ReplyDeleteGave me goosebumps! :)
ReplyDeleteI guess that was an ill-spent $1.99?
ReplyDeleteIn just a few words, you managed to build up quite a lot of suspense!
Incredible story in just a few words!
ReplyDeleteThat is a fantastic magpie. I want to know more. What happens next?
ReplyDeleteLove your short tale of disposession, and the image in the screen door says it all.
ReplyDeleteSneaks right up on us, as
ReplyDeleteyou juxtapose sentiment with
horror, and although dark and
pessimistic, we applaud your
verve and cleverness, and
somehow emerge less
emotional than when we
first encountered Tess' version.
Wow- packs quite a powerful ending...love the additional photo on the bottom.
ReplyDeleteOh my goodness, I wasn't expecting that. Wow! What a fascinating take on the prompt.
ReplyDelete— K
Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel
Excellent Magpie. Wonderful twist.
ReplyDeleteI thought she looked a bit sinister too ... excellent Magpie
ReplyDeleteDefinitely shivers down the spine.
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
you made a way to say it..
ReplyDeletenice!
JJRod'z
eerie. i wondered whose whisper was that..
ReplyDeleteYou did it...scared me silly in the morning..what a good take!!
ReplyDeleteHa! Watch out Tess! This is the first non-sad poem I have read from this prompt. Totally fun and creative.
ReplyDeleteFabulous! What a shock! Well done!
ReplyDeleteDear Kath W: Definitely chilling with the ghost lady! BBQ? Love the pic too!
ReplyDeleteA shocking Magpie. True, a chill ran down my spine.
ReplyDeleteWell, of all the ungrateful ghosts....! Great Magpie, Kathe, and the door pic is rather eerie. I think I'd be off, too!
ReplyDeleteA sneaky little ghost and a clever little tale.
ReplyDeleteDelightfully creepy!
ReplyDeleteGood tale-telling via verse.
ReplyDeleteGreat little story. Well worth the goosebumps.
ReplyDeleteThis is has sort of Twilight Zone feel eerie, haunted fantastic story!
ReplyDeletewowee! got a snap to it!
ReplyDeleteThere's something very evocative about a screen door. It conjures many memories for me. Nice.
ReplyDeleteSpooky!
ReplyDeleteExtremely clever.
ReplyDeleteOh this is a good one....Just loved it...bkm
ReplyDeleteWonderful! Love your take on this one. Also, the wonderful photo showing the 'new owner' in the screen door. You made my morning.
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