She had waited by the window
Every evening at five
Wishing to see his jaunty walk
and his glance with a smile
As the gloaming covered the city
She now closed the blinds
She now closed the blinds
Patting her tummy she murmered
"Okay kiddo-we're on our own"
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Thanks to Tess Kincaid for providing this fine image
by Jack Vettriano
and to read how others have perceived it go here:
http://magpietales.blogspot.com/
"Okay kiddo-we're on our own"
~~~~~~~~~
Thanks to Tess Kincaid for providing this fine image
by Jack Vettriano
and to read how others have perceived it go here:
http://magpietales.blogspot.com/
18 comments:
Now ~ put that damned cigarette down will you!!! (I've had a few of those OK it's just you and me now days)
I thought she might be pregnant, too. Sad.
She does look wistful, i like your interpretation.
ugh...this is so sad to me...i feel for her...but all the more so for the kid...
Your words add an extra dimension to the picture. Very nice.
Those jaunty steps- watch out! but I wondered the same thing at first- Thanks!
I like where you took us with this.
Hadn't thought of this angle.
Well done.
=)
Whoa! never saw that coming! Nice one!
Sad resignation shows clearly at the ending of your poem. Damn that guy with the jaunty step.
Oh so sad...
Another heel bites the dust..so sad for the foolish girl..well done!
As much as I feel sadness for the woman and her unborn child, I also feel for the man missing out on the loving relationships he is deliberately neglecting. It takes a community to raise a child but only Kathe can write such poignantly expressive poetry. Thank you for sharing.
So powerful, Kathe! The use of my favorite word (gloaming) to stress the end of the day and the end of a chapter in her life is wonderful.
I really felt the poignancy of this, Kathe, great success , you moved me
I loved this! Poor girl. Nappies at 2.30am are a nightmare on your own...!......
I love how the title sums it up so well.....great writing Kathe! :-)
I like your take on this. So sad. And I love the gloaming. Very well done. Thank you.
I like it - sad but so true in many cases.
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